{"content":{"sharePage":{"page":0,"digests":[{"id":"3038891","dateCreated":"1204311546","smartDate":"Feb 29, 2008","userCreated":{"username":"davidgarner","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/davidgarner","imageUrl":"https:\/\/ssl.wikicdn.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"},"monitored":false,"locked":false,"links":{"self":"https:\/\/sonnenallee.wikispaces.com\/share\/view\/3038891"},"dateDigested":1532091867,"startDate":null,"sharedType":"discussion","title":"Content and Organization Evaluation","description":"As far as content goes, everything looked really good. You gave a good brief history of the topic and a good explanation of its significance today. The organization was good, however, you could be a little more clear about the connection between different data\/research that you put forth and the nature of their relationship. Also, transitions between changing topics might also make the paper move along a little bit better. But overall, I thought it was very good.","replyPages":[{"page":0,"digests":[],"more":0}]},{"id":"3029213","dateCreated":"1204263172","smartDate":"Feb 28, 2008","userCreated":{"username":"jsparger","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/jsparger","imageUrl":"https:\/\/ssl.wikicdn.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"},"monitored":false,"locked":false,"links":{"self":"https:\/\/sonnenallee.wikispaces.com\/share\/view\/3029213"},"dateDigested":1532091867,"startDate":null,"sharedType":"discussion","title":"review","description":"Hey! It was really good. I'm sorry for putting those ugly corrections on your page. I was a little confused about what we were supposed to do for this peer evaluation!
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\nI think you guys could probably separate some of the sections a little bit and talk about the individual topics some more. I did have a little trouble understanding the history part of the page. Maybe you could elaborate more on who the people you mention, like Ernst Th\u00e4lmann and Uschi and Max Rubenstein.
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\nThis was a really good page. I hope ours turns out to be as good as yours!
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\nJohnathan","replyPages":[{"page":0,"digests":[],"more":0}]},{"id":"3028581","dateCreated":"1204258930","smartDate":"Feb 28, 2008","userCreated":{"username":"dhill18","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/dhill18","imageUrl":"https:\/\/ssl.wikicdn.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"},"monitored":false,"locked":false,"links":{"self":"https:\/\/sonnenallee.wikispaces.com\/share\/view\/3028581"},"dateDigested":1532091867,"startDate":null,"sharedType":"discussion","title":"review","description":"You give a good history of your topic. You provide enough information for somone who had no prior knowledge of that topic. It is organized good. You used different types of sentences. Maby add more infomation on what people thought about the FDJ.","replyPages":[{"page":0,"digests":[{"id":"3029537","body":"DIE ERSTE ENTWURF VON DIE FREIE DEUTSCHE JUGEND
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\nAlena Belfor ( Introduktion und Geschichte)
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\nSie h\u00e4tten viele Aktivit\u00e4ten... Meinst du "sie hatten"?
\nSie finden sie sich eine sozialistiche Massenorganisation und sie bekannte sich zur Rolle der Sozialisticke Einheitsparty Deutschland (SED). <---Was meinst du, genau?
\nDie FDJ w\u00e4ren\u2026Nochmal, meinst du \u201cThey would\u201d or \u201cthey were\u201d
\nHeute, diese Organisation ist jetzt wichtig\u2026meinst du \u201cjetzt\u201d oder \u201cnoch\u201d
\nDie FDJ in der DDR wurde am 7 M\u00e4rz 1946 in der Sowjetischen Besatzungszone gefunde\u2026gefunden oder gegruendet?
\n Nach der Mitgliedschaft in der Pioneer Organisation, Ernst Th\u00e4lmann\u2026Vielleicht kannst du erklaeren wer Ernst war und was die Jungpioner war
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\nJake (Leute in die Vergangenheit denken \u00fcber die FDJ recherchieren):
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\nDie Leute dass haben die FDJ angetroffen, sie mogen Faschismus nicht... Make sure your clauses are separated and the verbs are always where they need to be
\nDie Leute sind zu andere Land geflohen\u2026make sure if you have a dativ preposition, your adjective endings match
\nDie FDJ hat Jugend aus Deutschland neue Ideen und Orientierung geboten...This sentence is just a little unclear\u2026
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\nDas Regierungsform von Westen Berlin\u2026I think it might just be
\n\u201cwestberlin\u201d
\nIm 1951 die Westen Regierungform hat die FDJ verbieten... verb in 2nd position, verboten
\nViele Leute von die FDJ wurde gefangen halten\u2026von is always dativ, make sure your subject and verb agree
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\nIn den 60er und 70er Jahren, die FDJ war eine ruhige Gruppe...Verb in 2nd position
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\n[You might want to go through and spell check]
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\nSHEA: Die FDJ Heute (nach die Berlin Mauer hat gefallen) \u2013 Die Reputation und Wichtige:
\nHeute geh\u00f6ren wenige Mitgleider die Freie Deutsche Jugend zu..I\u2019m not sure zu goes at the end. 1992 hat die
\n\u2026aber Ost Deutscher hat\u2026do you mean \u201cdie Ostdeutschen haben\u201d?
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\nOverall all three parts were straightforward and to the point\u2014pretty easy to understand. Very nice concise history, a good overview. My main suggestions are to go back and simplify some sentences, and really review the grammar, syntax, and s\/v agreement.","dateCreated":"1204267628","smartDate":"Feb 28, 2008","userCreated":{"username":"AmyHill","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/AmyHill","imageUrl":"https:\/\/ssl.wikicdn.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"}}],"more":0}]}],"more":false},"comments":[]},"http":{"code":200,"status":"OK"},"redirectUrl":null,"javascript":null,"notices":{"warning":[],"error":[],"info":[],"success":[]}}