{"content":{"sharePage":{"page":0,"digests":[{"id":"3026243","dateCreated":"1204250876","smartDate":"Feb 28, 2008","userCreated":{"username":"ssoma","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/ssoma","imageUrl":"https:\/\/ssl.wikicdn.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"},"monitored":false,"locked":false,"links":{"self":"https:\/\/sonnenallee.wikispaces.com\/share\/view\/3026243"},"dateDigested":1532091861,"startDate":null,"sharedType":"discussion","title":"Peer Review","description":"Very well written! Almost perfectly organized. It is lacking just a little in the material department. If that is all the information available, than disregard what I said. Flowed well and not hard to read. You COULD use a small vocab list at the bottom if you feel its necessary, most of the words are clear and recognizable. Overall, very well done from beginning to end! Careful for typos (40 Perzent Jugendlih) - near end of paper.","replyPages":[{"page":0,"digests":[],"more":0}]},{"id":"3018221","dateCreated":"1204229038","smartDate":"Feb 28, 2008","userCreated":{"username":"jwaits","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/jwaits","imageUrl":"https:\/\/ssl.wikicdn.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"},"monitored":false,"locked":false,"links":{"self":"https:\/\/sonnenallee.wikispaces.com\/share\/view\/3018221"},"dateDigested":1532091861,"startDate":null,"sharedType":"discussion","title":"Peer Review","description":"The information is well organized and easy to follow. The vocabulary is advanced, yet not so much that the article is difficult to understand. Your also introduce each paragraph with good transitions, and the sentences flow together nicely. I would suggest that you add more about the history. Since these youths had no set religion and were coming together to form a kind of alliance, how did the people of Germany react to this? Just elaborate a bit more.","replyPages":[{"page":0,"digests":[],"more":0}]},{"id":"3017959","dateCreated":"1204228333","smartDate":"Feb 28, 2008","userCreated":{"username":"abelfor","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/abelfor","imageUrl":"https:\/\/ssl.wikicdn.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"},"monitored":false,"locked":false,"links":{"self":"https:\/\/sonnenallee.wikispaces.com\/share\/view\/3017959"},"dateDigested":1532091861,"startDate":null,"sharedType":"discussion","title":"Peer Review","description":"Overall, this draft is very organized and well written. The content is detailed but not overwhelming and provided so that a person who has never heard of it before can read and understand this topic. The history aspect could have more details in it as well. When speaking about what children may have thought about the celebration, you may include it in the "Vergangenheit and Heute" paragraph. Although the vocabulary is not too complex, a short glossary would be a helpful asset to this draft. Also, good use of providing six sources for the Jugendweihe topic as well. Good topic sentences and transitions were provided to introduce what would be in the rest of the paragraph. Good job!","replyPages":[{"page":0,"digests":[],"more":0}]},{"id":"2983161","dateCreated":"1204084827","smartDate":"Feb 26, 2008","userCreated":{"username":"hauerc","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/hauerc","imageUrl":"https:\/\/ssl.wikicdn.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"},"monitored":false,"locked":false,"links":{"self":"https:\/\/sonnenallee.wikispaces.com\/share\/view\/2983161"},"dateDigested":1532091861,"startDate":null,"sharedType":"discussion","title":"Peer Review by Christine Hauer","description":"Sehr Gut!!:))
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\nContent:
\nThe page\u2019s content was quite good. It included an introduction and a clear definition of the topic. There also was a brief history of the topic and it showed the relevance of the Jugendweihe. I think there could have been more references to dates and times it was most prevalent. I don\u2019t have a good idea of when in history it took place the most. Also, maybe more could be added about how someone our age would have viewed Jugundweihe.
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\nOrganization:
\nThe introduction was good, but I think you should try and tie in the last two paragraphs more. They felt a little out of place and didn\u2019t make the writing flow.
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\nLanguage and Style:
\nThe language was very comprehensive and easy to understand. I thought there was a good use of vocabulary.
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\nOther:
\nThey used 6 references as required.
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\nOverall Evaluation:
\nVery well done! I would make the essay somewhat more connected and create some more transitions. More dates and time periods might help orient the reader towards the topic a little better. Additionally, I would add pictures! I love pictures and they could help describe the topic.","replyPages":[{"page":0,"digests":[{"id":"3006721","body":"Content:
\nVery well-written, especially introduction. Jugendweihe was very easy to understand for someone who had never heard of it. Article could use more detail about specifics of the ceremony and history. Also need some material on how someone our age would view Jugendweihe.
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\nOrganization:
\nIntroduction was well-written and for the most part the article flowed well. Could use more transitions between paragraphs.
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\nLanguage and Style:
\nSentence structure was well-varied and article was very easy to read.
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\nOther:
\nAll sources in place.
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\nOverall Evaluation:
\nThis article is very well-done and easy to read and understand. May require more detail.","dateCreated":"1204177098","smartDate":"Feb 27, 2008","userCreated":{"username":"daviste","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/daviste","imageUrl":"https:\/\/ssl.wikicdn.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"}}],"more":0}]}],"more":false},"comments":[]},"http":{"code":200,"status":"OK"},"redirectUrl":null,"javascript":null,"notices":{"warning":[],"error":[],"info":[],"success":[]}}