{"content":{"sharePage":{"page":0,"digests":[{"id":"3029669","dateCreated":"1204271276","smartDate":"Feb 28, 2008","userCreated":{"username":"jsparger","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/jsparger","imageUrl":"https:\/\/ssl.wikicdn.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"},"monitored":false,"locked":false,"links":{"self":"https:\/\/sonnenallee.wikispaces.com\/share\/view\/3029669"},"dateDigested":1532091843,"startDate":null,"sharedType":"discussion","title":"Peer Review","description":"I really liked your page. I'm sorry for putting those gaudy looking corrections at the bottom, I just wasn't sure if we were supposed to do them or not, so I did!
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\nI think that you did a good job talking about the history. The references to East Germany and the GDR after 1990 were confusing me. I may have just misunderstood.
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\nIt was nice that you explained the political theories Marx a little. Maybe you could talk some about Lenin's ideas as well (Maybe he was a marxist, I don't know anything about that!)
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\nMy suggestion would be to watch your verb tenses.
\nYou might also consider putting in a Glossary.
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\nI'll keep reading, but it looks good! I like your pictures too. I hope we can do as well as you guys do!
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\nJohnathan","replyPages":[{"page":0,"digests":[],"more":0}]},{"id":"3029605","dateCreated":"1204269209","smartDate":"Feb 28, 2008","userCreated":{"username":"AmyHill","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/AmyHill","imageUrl":"https:\/\/ssl.wikicdn.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"},"monitored":false,"locked":false,"links":{"self":"https:\/\/sonnenallee.wikispaces.com\/share\/view\/3029605"},"dateDigested":1532091843,"startDate":null,"sharedType":"discussion","title":"Peer edit","description":"Die Sozialistische Einheitspartei Deutschlands (SED) war eine kommunistische Partei.
\n1946 war sie von die\u2026von is always dativ
\nFusion zwischen\u2026gegr\u00fcndet \uf0df I think \u201cdurch\u201d would be a better preposition
\nSie wurde die Regierung\u2026Are you trying to use passive or say that \u201cthey were\/sie waren\u201d
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\nDie SED hat am 1990 in Deutschland abgeschlossen, weil die Leute mehr Freiheit gemacht hat \uf0df what exactly are you trying to say?
\n\u2026sie hatte die zuerste Wahl\u2026\uf0df I think it might just be
\ndie erste Wahl
\nIn 2005 die PDS\u2026\uf0df its just \u201c2005 die PDS\u2026\u201d
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\n\u2026aber ein paare Leute hat es geliebt... \uf0df geliebt or gemocht?
\nDie Mehrheit von Leute lebten ins w\u00f6hnblocke, welches kreiertet eine Freundliche kleiner Gemeinschaft... \uf0df \u201c\u2026ins Woehnblocke, die \u2026. Kreiertet\u201d conjugated verb at the end
\nAber, meisten von die Leute...you don\u2019t need the comma and die is always dativ
\nSie war bei die\u2026 \uf0df bei is always dativ
\nnach die Invasion\u2026 \uf0df nach is always dativ
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\nDeutschen Kommunism berkannt\u2026 \uf0df berkannt? Oder bekannt?
\n\u2026\u00fcber weil\u2026 \uf0df always a comma separating weil clauses
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\nZu Gesellschaft \u2026 \uf0df you (almost) always need an article
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\nSie wollen Faschisten verbieten... \uf0df here you\u2019re using present tense, but at other times you use past. Just watch out for that
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\nOverall this was a really interesting and easy to understand article, and very helpful as well. It was informative without going into too much detail. My main suggestions would be to just go over grammar and keep an eye on the tenses; make sure you consistently use one tense. Also, just to be safe, I would review the adjective endings. That\u2019s always a good thing to do.","replyPages":[{"page":0,"digests":[{"id":"3029627","body":"Also, since there's no more East Germany...Maybe you should say "in eastern Germany" instead of "in East Germany". Its a small difference but an important one.","dateCreated":"1204269711","smartDate":"Feb 28, 2008","userCreated":{"username":"AmyHill","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/AmyHill","imageUrl":"https:\/\/ssl.wikicdn.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"}}],"more":0}]},{"id":"3017457","dateCreated":"1204227405","smartDate":"Feb 28, 2008","userCreated":{"username":"euitenda","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/euitenda","imageUrl":"https:\/\/ssl.wikicdn.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"},"monitored":false,"locked":false,"links":{"self":"https:\/\/sonnenallee.wikispaces.com\/share\/view\/3017457"},"dateDigested":1532091843,"startDate":null,"sharedType":"discussion","title":"SED","description":"I.Content
\nIntroduction 2.5
\nBrief History 3
\nSignificance 3
\nAge 4
\nReputation 1
\nLittle Knowledge 3.5
\n I know alot about German history, so for me, some parts are really weak. For someone who is not fimiliar with the subject it will probably be very helpful. Talk about what it means today, a hint 'Ostalgie' or nostalgia for the East
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\nII. Orginization
\nTopic sentence 3
\nRelationship 3
\nTransitions 3
\nOne problem that I see is that you dont have paragraphs until the bottom of the page. Before that you depend on bullets. On the worksheet it says paragraphs, but I think it is very helpful, so check with Dr. Arnold to see if this is ok.
\nIII. Language
\nComprehensible 4
\nGlossary 1
\nVaried 3
\nIV. Other
\n6 References 3
\nYou only have four official ones, but many one hyperlinks, I am not sure if this is ok. I suggest that you find two more and add them.
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\nAs a whole, I thinki it is very good. It is very informative, but focus a little more on the history of the party, for instance, before WWI it was the largest party in Germany, but it was also illegal. After WWI a few of its leaders were assassinated. It was an opposition party to the Nazis.","replyPages":[{"page":0,"digests":[],"more":0}]}],"more":false},"comments":[]},"http":{"code":200,"status":"OK"},"redirectUrl":null,"javascript":null,"notices":{"warning":[],"error":[],"info":[],"success":[]}}